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I’m looking
looking at this cross-section of time past
of our love before it was dusty,
at a
photo I snapped of you
spontaneously on your bed.
It’s of your eyes
and nose and
mouth,
     traces of what the razor
missed,
the shadows and light and all the things that
make up one’s
glance at any given time.

It’s nice to have these photos
it is
because many times I can look at them for a
long
         time
and smell soap and feel cotton shirts
and hear the chaos seeping through that
vent in your floor
etc.
In this picture though,
you were looking at me.
Not ME,
but the me that looked through the lens.
Your eyes don’t follow
Me now
as some pictures or paintings do.

You were looking at me.
The ME behind the lens and
I’m not
that me
anymore.

And I’m staring at you
now.
But you just gaze lovingly at the person
taking the picture and
           I try
real hard
to imagine,

but still I’m
not that
me
anymore.

And the You
that I look at now
is too preoccupied to look
directly at the Me
holding the frame with wet eyes.



But pictures are
nice to look at
sometimes
if
you’re not expecting
too
much, and
if
that time that your
love took your picture,
your glance at her was
faster than the shutter.
©2005-2010 ~quintessa27
:iconquintessa27:

Author's Comments

full title: "Your eyes looking up and slightly to the left"

i discouraged critique on this not b/c i'm pussing out, but because I've just been writing "in the moment" poetry to get me writing again. nothing to serious...not that i ever write anything that i consider very serious or socially importent, lol.

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:iconterrapinflyer:
i did enjoy it, very interesting concept w/ the 'you' taking the picture being a different you than you now, and him lookign at 'you' and you differently, whoa :thumbsup:

if this is 'just to get writing again' poetry then i'd have to say its damn fine, jolly good, keep it up and all that :peace:

--
"...but the trees are all made equal, by hatchet, axe, and saw..."
--Rush, Trees
:iconmaltaaduialien:
As Dennis said, jolly good! The whole concept is very interesting. I like how it's metaphorical without being showy, if that makes any sense.
:iconquintessa27:
thanks dennis! i'm happy to know that it was well recieved anyways. :)

--
"I build each one of my songs out of glass so you can see me inside them, I suppose, or you could leave the image of me in the background I guess, and watch your own reflection superimposed."--Ani DiFranco
:iconquintessa27:
thanks katie :D

--
"I build each one of my songs out of glass so you can see me inside them, I suppose, or you could leave the image of me in the background I guess, and watch your own reflection superimposed."--Ani DiFranco
:iconlecco:
I need to read this many many many times.

Beautiful perspective on the passage of time and the aging of a relationship.

This is just beautiful, Meg.
:iconlecco:
I need to read this many many many times.

Beautiful perspective on the passage of time and the aging of a relationship.

This is just beautiful, Meg.
:iconquintessa27:
:jawdrop: wow, thanks so much Lecwhoa!!! :D I'm very very happy you liked it.

--
"I build each one of my songs out of glass so you can see me inside them, I suppose, or you could leave the image of me in the background I guess, and watch your own reflection superimposed."--Ani DiFranco
:iconmoldycheesepuff:
wow theres too much i have to say out of this just wow.... amazing :hug: just, wow..... *completely unable to put any of the thoughts racing through my head down right now after reading it about 5 times* just....wow

--
-"If I leave here tomorrow. Will you still remember me?"
-"You must be the change you wish to see in the world"
-"All you need is love"
:iconquintessa27:
:D wow--thank you! :D :D

--
"I build each one of my songs out of glass so you can see me inside them, I suppose, or you could leave the image of me in the background I guess, and watch your own reflection superimposed."--Ani DiFranco

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